User:BLeverich/sandbox

Selected Article For Wikipedia Final Project

Korean Wave

Article Evaluation

I think the lead in this article is well written and cited. I also think that the fact that this article has an overview is actually a useful addition. Some things seem to need some updated sources and citation but I feel it is a solid piece of writing to edit.

Sources For Editing/Updating Wiki Page

[1] Lim, Eunjung, and Dennis Halpin. The Korean Wave in American Politics. US-Korea Institute at SAIS, 2015, www.jstor.org/stable/resrep11119

[2] Howard, Keith. 2010. “East Asian Pop Culture: Analysing the Korean Wave.” Bulletin of the School of Oriental & African Studies 73 (1): 144–46. doi:10.1017/S0041977X09990589.

[3] Nam, Siho. "The Cultural Political Economy of the Korean Wave in East Asia: Implications for Cultural Globalization Theories." Asian Perspective 37, no. 2 (2013): 209-31. http://www.jstor.org/stable/42704826.

[4] Kim, Dae Young. "The Birth of Korean Cool." Sociological Forum30, no. 4 (2015): 1125-129. http://www.jstor.org/stable/24878719.

Hyun Oh-Seok. 2004. “Taking Advantage of the Hallyu Wave.” Korea Focus 12 (6): 47–49. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=15565670&site=ehost-live

Sections To Edit:

Overview Section:

In China, many broadcasters have taken influences from Korean entertainment programs such as Running Man; in 2014 SBS announced the Chinese version of this program, Hurry Up, Brother, which was a major hit as an example of a unique category of programs known as 'urban action varieties'.

Korean media has also been influential throughout Asia in terms of beauty standards. In Taiwan, where the drama Dae Jang Geum was extremely popular, some fans reportedly underwent cosmetic surgery to look similar to lead actress Lee Young-ae."

• For this section add more on the spread of Korean cuisine into other countries
• I added my own image of Korean Cabbage Kimchi to show a staple of Korean Cuisine that has become globally known due to the Korean Wave

Editing The Lead:

The Korean Wave (Korean: 한류; Hanja: 韓流; RR: 'Hallyu'; MR: 'Hallyu', listen (help·info), a neologism, literally meaning "flow of Korea") is the increase in global popularity of South Korean culture since the 1990s. First driven by the spread of K-dramas and K-pop across East, South, and Southeast Asia during its initial stages, the Korean Wave evolved from a regional development into a global phenomenon, carried by the Internet and social media and the proliferation of K-pop music videos on YouTube. The term Hallyu, a variation of a Japanese expression using Ryu(流) as a postfix to refer ‘～way’, ‘~style’, ‘～group’, was first used by the Ministry of Culture and Tourism in South Korea in 1999, when the ministry produced a music CD titled in Chinese "韓流—Song From Korea". The term was adopted by Chinese media to refer to the success of South Korean popular culture in China. The term was reintroduced in Japan as hanryu or kanryu by the Asahi Shimbun in 2001.

• Needs editing because according to my research the term "hallyu" was coined 2 years prior in 1997 by China as "hanliu" (korean wave) when the first korean tv dramas were aired on Chinese television networks
• I have edited and changed that part of the lead to >> "While some sources attribute the term Hallyu, a variation of a Japanese expression using Ryu(流) as a postfix to refer ‘～way’, ‘~style’, ‘～group’, to being first used by the Ministry of Culture and Tourism in South Korea in 1999, when the ministry produced a music CD titled in Chinese "韓流—Song From Korea ; others attribute the term's comeuppance from Korean television dramas first airing on Chinese television in 1997, naming the phenomenon hanliu meaning "Korean Wave".
• I have also opened conversation up about this in the Talk page for this article Talk:Korean Wave

"The success of the Korean Wave owes in part to the development of social networking services and online video sharing platforms, which have allowed the Korean entertainment industry to reach a sizeable overseas audience. Use of these media in facilitating promotion, distribution, and consumption of various forms of Korean entertainment (and K-pop in particular) has contributed to their surge in worldwide popularity since the mid-2000s."

• I have edited this section of the Lead for grammar and better flow: "The success of the Korean Wave is, in part, due to the development of social networking services and online video sharing platforms; which have allowed the Korean Entertainment Industry to reach a sizable overseas audience. Through the use of social media in facilitating promotion, distribution, and consumption of various forms of Korean Entertainment—specifically K-Pop—that has contributed to the surge in worldwide popularity since the mid-2000s"
  

2010–present: Korean Wave globally Section Edit:

Nothing on the Korean Wave wiki page goes into detail about Kcon, an immensely popular and now huge Korean Cultural Convention.

[5] KCon Official Site

• "KCON USA is the original convention dedicated to bring “All Things Hallyu” to the American fan base. KCON is the one place where every element of Hallyu encompassing pop music, TV dramas, movies, fashion, food, and beauty can be experienced and celebrated. At KCON, you can encounter your favorite stars, stimulating panels, interactive workshops, and countless booths of fun dedicated to putting the world of Hallyu at your fingertips! KCON began as a one day event in 2012 at the Verizon Wireless Amphitheatre in Irvine. After three years of exponential growth, KCON 2015 grew to a five-day festival in two locations: a three-day festival in the enormous Los Angeles Convention Center, two nights of concerts in the iconic Staples Center and a first-ever KCON in the New York Metro Area at the Prudential Center with a concert night! KCON now stands as one of the “22 Best Music Festivals of 2015” listed by FUSE. Hallyu continues to prove itself as a global phenomenon as KCON 2016 expands to take place once again in Japan and heads over to the UAE for KCON Abu Dhabi. This will be the first time such a large K-pop event is being hosted in the Middle East and marks an enormous expansion of K-Pop overseas. KCON is also becoming a valuable platform for industry professionals to connect with their audience, create content, and expand the Hallyu community. In 2017, the brand further expanded internationally, presenting KCON in Mexico and Australia as well as returning to Japan. Over 147,000 fans came to celebrate KCON NY and LA last year combined. KCON 2019 NY will take place at Madison Square Garden and Javits Center for the first time, and KCON 2019 LA will be extended to four days at the Staples Center and LACC. KCON will continue to feature a concert line-up of more artists, celebrity meet and greets, as well as workshops and panels that cover every aspect of Korean culture and entertainment. It’s a celebration bringing more fans, more stars, more panels, and more hi-touches! Let’s KCON!"
• Condensed and edited above and added it to the Korean Wave wiki page>> "Since 2012 KCON (music festival) has been the first large-scale convention to bring all aspects of Korean culture to American audiences. Originally a singular event lasting only one day in Irvine California USA, today it has expanded into eight different countries spanning over multiple days and locations."
• Added Kcon's official website as one of the sources for the condensed version of the paragraph above

Response To Peer Review

In Response To The Lead:

While I had overwhelming positive feedback for the edits I implemented in the lead, I might consider trying to edit and make the lead slightly more concisely detailed. I felt the lead itself did a decent job at conveying what the article will discuss but some of my peer reviews thought the lead was lacking some detail.

In Response To Content Evaluation:

My information added and the information added by others is up to date and relevant,but some sections are lacking. While there is minimal information in sections such as Hallyu's impact in Iraq and US that my peers suggest I overhaul and edit, I feel its important to know ones own limitations. While the Iraq section does need more information my plan is to edit and add information to completely fill out the US section (and also fix some misrepresented information in the article itself), I know that I will not have the time to overhaul the entire article itself so I want to concentrate all of my time and energy on specific sections so that I can add good reliable information and increase the quality of the article.

In Response To Tone And Balance Evaluation:

I feel that this portion of the evaluation is where I can safely say I have done well. I try to simply present information rather than write edits in a persuasive way. One thing that I might need to change though is the added citation of KCON's website. I am unsure if this goes against wikipedia's strict guidelines but I was not sure how to go about adding information about KCON itself when there is no scholarly research and the official KCON website is readily available.

In Response To Sources And References:

Again I had great feedback on my sources and references but I might change the addition of KCON's website citation after researching more about wikipedia's guidelines.

In Response To Organization:

I had feedback telling me my edits were grammatically correct and organized in a way that was logical, so I feel that I do not have to edit much when it comes to the organization and layout choices I make in my article.

In Response To The Overall Review:

Overall my article was said to be balanced and neutral and use proper sources and good organization. Again while my peers suggest that I edit many of the influenced country sections in my article I know my limits and what I can contribute to the overall quality of the article itself, so I will continue to make edits and add substantial content to the sections I have chosen to work on throughout my article.

Article Selection

Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

Joseon

Article Evaluation

The article itself has many sources and seems decently written. I feel that the lead could be altered to be more concise and some wording needs to be changed so it does not sound too persuasive. More citations need to be added in certain sections. Being a historical topic, many sources and research will be at my disposal to edit this article into a better quality article.

Sources

Sŏng-mi, Yi. ""Euigwe" and the Documentation of Joseon Court Ritual Life." Archives of Asian Art 58 (2008): 113-33. http://www.jstor.org/stable/20542570.

Kye, Seung B. "The Altar of Great Gratitude: A Korean Memory of Ming China under Manchu Dominance, 1704–1894." Journal of Korean Religions 5, no. 2 (2014): 71-88. http://www.jstor.org/stable/24329485.

Soon-yang KIM. 2013. “Uncovering the Confucian Foundation of Public Sector Welfare in Joseon.” Korea Journal 53 (1): 31–64. doi:10.25024/kj.2013.53.1.31.

Marriage in South Korea

Article Evaluation

The lead for this article is too short and does not convey what the article aims to enlighten the readers on. I feel the lead needs to be a bit longer and needs good cited sources. This article does not sound overly persuasive and reads in a fact displaying manner. There are some grammatical and spelling errors that need to be fixed but not many. This article definitely needs more citations from credible sources. I also think that the addition of more visual aid would be appropriate in helping readers to understand the differences in marriage styles and time periods.

Sources

[6] Amendment to the Naturalization Examination and Its Social Impact on International Marriage Immigrants in South Korea JIYOON LEE University of Pennsylvania Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, United States

[7] Sangyoub. "Korean Multiculturalism and the Marriage Squeeze." Contexts 10, no. 3 (2011): 64-65. http://www.jstor.org/stable/41960234.

[8]“South Korea: Women Fight to Abolish Patriarchal Marriage Laws.” 2001. Off Our Backs 31 (10): 5. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=5557164&site=ehost-live.

Option 3

Korean Wave

Article Evaluation

I think the lead in this article is well written and cited. I also think that the fact that this article has an overview is actually a useful addition. Some things seem to need some updated sources and citation but I feel it is a solid piece of writing to edit.

Sources

Lim, Eunjung, and Dennis Halpin. The Korean Wave in American Politics. US-Korea Institute at SAIS, 2015, www.jstor.org/stable/resrep11119

Howard, Keith. 2010. “East Asian Pop Culture: Analysing the Korean Wave.” Bulletin of the School of Oriental & African Studies 73 (1): 144–46. doi:10.1017/S0041977X09990589.

Nam, Siho. "The Cultural Political Economy of the Korean Wave in East Asia: Implications for Cultural Globalization Theories." Asian Perspective 37, no. 2 (2013): 209-31. http://www.jstor.org/stable/42704826.

Hyun Oh-Seok. 2004. “Taking Advantage of the Hallyu Wave.” Korea Focus 12 (6): 47–49. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=15565670&site=ehost-live.

Option 4

Big Hit Entertainment

Article Evaluation

The lead for this article is short, to the point, and conveys what the article will be discussing. The article itself is very short but has 35 listed sources so I feel that it could be a good article to edit and expand on. One issue might be finding more information dealing with the company itself.

Sources

Tsai, Patricia. 2013. “Discovering the Full Potential of the 360 Deal: An Analysis of the Korean Pop Industry, Seven-Year Statute, and Talent Agencies Act of California.” UCLA Entertainment Law Review 20 (2): 323–49. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=102361596&site=ehost-live.

Shin, Solee, and Lanu Kim. 2013. “Organizing K-Pop: Emergence and Market Making of Large Korean Entertainment Houses, 1980-2010.” East Asia: An International Quarterly 30 (4): 255–72. doi:10.1007/s12140-013-9200-0.

JUNG, E. ALEX. 2018. “The UNSTOPPABLE BTS.” Billboard 130 (5): 40–47. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=128238800&site=ehost-live.

https://www.bighitcorp.com/eng/

Option 5

BTS (band)

Article Evaluation

The article lead is concise and decently conveys the article topic. This article is in need of some more citations and source material (it could go to show that the amount of scholarly source material is limited). The article seems to be written in a fact presenting way instead of coming off as too persuasive. If more credible source material can be found it could be a good article to expand on.

Sources

Yoo, Yeawon, Yonghan Ju, and So Young Sohn. 2017. “Quantitative Analysis of a Half-Century of K-Pop Songs: Association Rule Analysis of Lyrics and Social Network Analysis of Singers and Composers.” Journal of Popular Music Studies (Wiley-Blackwell) 29 (3): n/a-N.PAG. doi:10.1111/jpms.12225.

Greenblatt, Leah. 2019. “THE GREATEST SHOW MEN BTS. (Cover Story).” Entertainment Weekly, no. 1556/1557 (April): 16–27. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=135594743&site=ehost-live.

Kwak, Hye-eun, Joon-ho Kim, Sun-young Kim, Ju-eee Jung, and Hyun-ju Choi. 2019. “Korean Dance Performance Influences on Prospective Tourist Cultural Products Consumption and Behaviour Intention.” Journal of Psychology in Africa 29 (3): 230–36. doi:10.1080/14330237.2019.1626131.